Success criteria:
To be able to develop character using dialogue
To be able to give a sense of atmosphere using dialogue
To be able to use synonyms of said to create expression
To be able to use speech marks correctly
To be able to use adverbs after verbs
“Where are we going?”asked the woman suspiciously as she stared straight ahead.
The man looked across at her slyly. “Somewhere,”he answered mysteriously.
“Why are you doing this? We could be sent to jail for sneaking out of work.” Her leopard skin fleece covered her as the wind shot into the car. Her hair was matching her fleece and was flapping about in the wind.
“You’ll see” he yelled, annoyed with all the questions. His blue hair stood up like pins and his suit was neat and not creased.
The engine rumbled under my feet as the car surged forward.
“What is the meaning of this?” I asked angrily. He just smiled. I heard the sirens behind us and knew we had been found.
“ Damn!” The man exclaimed, as he stomped on the accelerator.
“Look out!” I cried, but it was too late. The car went hurtling over the edge of the canyon…
I screamed as the car plunged downwards. Suddenly, a parachute burst from the roof. I sighed in relief as the car glided gently to the ground. The man turned the key in the ignition and the car stopped.
“Where are we?”I asked.
“You will soon find out…”the man said mysteriously. All of a sudden, he grabbed me and pulled out a revolver. I screamed.
“Oh be quiet,” he said impatiently. “You’re not going to die. At least not yet anyway.”
He aimed the revolver to the sky and fired three times. And then, with a humongous groan, the rockface split open and he dragged me inside…
She subtly handed me the money without even looking at me. Then she asked ” All the evidence was destroyed I presume?”
” With ease,” I replied.
” And the CCTV cameras were disabled?” I nodded, stopped the car and she elegantly stepped out. ” Don’t spend it all at once, she said.
” Wow. $10,000 and all I had to do was kidnap 9 people.”
” Sure. Just make sure your face is never seen in the United States Of America again, and you won’t be shot in the back,” she slammed the door shut and disappeared around the corner into a shady alleyway…
Success criteria:
To be able to develop character using dialogue
To be able to give a sense of atmosphere using dialogue
To be able to use synonyms of said to create expression
To be able to use speech marks correctly
To be able to use adverbs after verbs
“Where are we going?”asked the woman suspiciously as she stared straight ahead.
The man looked across at her slyly. “Somewhere,”he answered mysteriously.
“Why are you doing this? We could be sent to jail for sneaking out of work.” Her leopard skin fleece covered her as the wind shot into the car. Her hair was matching her fleece and was flapping about in the wind.
“You’ll see” he yelled, annoyed with all the questions. His blue hair stood up like pins and his suit was neat and not creased.
The engine rumbled under my feet as the car surged forward.
“What is the meaning of this?” I asked angrily. He just smiled. I heard the sirens behind us and knew we had been found.
“ Damn!” The man exclaimed, as he stomped on the accelerator.
“Look out!” I cried, but it was too late. The car went hurtling over the edge of the canyon…
Part 2 coming soon!
I screamed as the car plunged downwards. Suddenly, a parachute burst from the roof. I sighed in relief as the car glided gently to the ground. The man turned the key in the ignition and the car stopped.
“Where are we?”I asked.
“You will soon find out…”the man said mysteriously. All of a sudden, he grabbed me and pulled out a revolver. I screamed.
“Oh be quiet,” he said impatiently. “You’re not going to die. At least not yet anyway.”
He aimed the revolver to the sky and fired three times. And then, with a humongous groan, the rockface split open and he dragged me inside…
THE END
She subtly handed me the money without even looking at me. Then she asked ” All the evidence was destroyed I presume?”
” With ease,” I replied.
” And the CCTV cameras were disabled?” I nodded, stopped the car and she elegantly stepped out. ” Don’t spend it all at once, she said.
” Wow. $10,000 and all I had to do was kidnap 9 people.”
” Sure. Just make sure your face is never seen in the United States Of America again, and you won’t be shot in the back,” she slammed the door shut and disappeared around the corner into a shady alleyway…