Soft breeze danced, the flowers were swaying to the rhythm, and young Kat walked slowly, admiring the park. She noticed the beauty of the trees and how unique they were. Our heroine wrote on the tree: Kat was here.
Spring warmth past through the pollinated , admired flowers, here lied our heroine Amy. Amy always came to this park…but something changed that.
Amy was casually walking around the park minding her own business as usual when she overheard a man walk near her. Amy panicked she thought of a great escape but…it was too late now.
Amy had once walked through the soothing , baby , roses.
Amy once talked and now her life came to an end…
A carpet of beautiful bluebells weeped and the wavy grass was covered in dew. All flora stepped aside for the dirt while the delicate spring leaves swayed in the subtle breeze. Nothing but warm sunshine disturbed this serene park, which was a oasis of tranquility, and the plants all relaxed to enjoy the spectacular spring.
A calm breeze flowed through the majestic trees as flowers all around welcomed travellers from far away lands and a muddy path snaked around the field. A bird sang in the morning sun while bees and butterflies collected nectar and the people stare in awe at the magnificence of nature. Trees bowed like servants addressing their masters. The umbrella like trees, weakened the beams of sunlight. A whiff of air like the breath of God coming down from heaven, as if to clear all the world clean.
A soft breeze of warm summer air licked our heroine’s hair as she skipped joyfully down the muddy cobbled path. She lay down and sprawled herself out on the bluebell littered ground feeling at peace with the world. She was blissfully unaware that a creature, was prowling through the woods, smelling blood as he stealthily crept through the mysterious forest…
The swaying willow trees cast shadows across the forest. The beautiful blooming bluebells coated the grassy fields like a intricate tapestry woven by nature. Shards of sunlight glinted off the morning dew, which had clung to the bright green grass. A calming breeze drifted peacefully through the trees, as a sparrow’s melodious voice pierced the silence of the calm summer day. Nearby, a muddy path snaked through the grass and further on, a stream meandered through the hills on the other side of the forest. The calming sounds of the water reached the ears of every creature around it. Overhead, the bright sun burnt down on the forest creatures. This was a land nobody had been able to reach before. It was paradise.
Ewen, I think that your setting description is absolutely beautiful. Your vocabulary choices and sentence structure, together with the literacy devices you have used are so effective. With your permission, I would like to post your description on Owls’ blog to inspire my class. Please can you let me know. Thank you, and well done.
As the blood thirsty creature felt our heroine’s presence, he found at last a descent snack. As the four-legged beast crept up behind our heroine he got ready to pounce. 1 2 3 he pounced ripping the air as he shot like a bullet and landed on top of are defenseless heroine. The dark deed was done. As our heroine lay dead and immobile, the beast started to head home. A trickle of blood ran from his mouth.
The swaying trees blocked all sunlight as a strange and mysterious girl walked past. This girl was no ordinary girl. She was a shape-shifter who turned into that horrible beast that killed our beloved heroine. She was a killer and she knew it…
Soft breeze danced, the flowers were swaying to the rhythm, and young Kat walked slowly, admiring the park. She noticed the beauty of the trees and how unique they were. Our heroine wrote on the tree: Kat was here.
Spring warmth past through the pollinated , admired flowers, here lied our heroine Amy. Amy always came to this park…but something changed that.
Amy was casually walking around the park minding her own business as usual when she overheard a man walk near her. Amy panicked she thought of a great escape but…it was too late now.
Amy had once walked through the soothing , baby , roses.
Amy once talked and now her life came to an end…
Very discriped Ilaria! I like it.
Thank you very much phoebe I hope you enjoyed it.
Well done Ilaria! Very descriptive!
Also it is very well written in general!
Sorry, not Amy auto-correct it was Adelaine.
Adelaine was now in hospital to be saved after skipping a beat of her heart and is now in recovery.
What happens next?
A carpet of beautiful bluebells weeped and the wavy grass was covered in dew. All flora stepped aside for the dirt while the delicate spring leaves swayed in the subtle breeze. Nothing but warm sunshine disturbed this serene park, which was a oasis of tranquility, and the plants all relaxed to enjoy the spectacular spring.
A calm breeze flowed through the majestic trees as flowers all around welcomed travellers from far away lands and a muddy path snaked around the field. A bird sang in the morning sun while bees and butterflies collected nectar and the people stare in awe at the magnificence of nature. Trees bowed like servants addressing their masters. The umbrella like trees, weakened the beams of sunlight. A whiff of air like the breath of God coming down from heaven, as if to clear all the world clean.
Wow… I’m impressed because it was very interesting to read.5⭐️
A soft breeze of warm summer air licked our heroine’s hair as she skipped joyfully down the muddy cobbled path. She lay down and sprawled herself out on the bluebell littered ground feeling at peace with the world. She was blissfully unaware that a creature, was prowling through the woods, smelling blood as he stealthily crept through the mysterious forest…
The swaying willow trees cast shadows across the forest. The beautiful blooming bluebells coated the grassy fields like a intricate tapestry woven by nature. Shards of sunlight glinted off the morning dew, which had clung to the bright green grass. A calming breeze drifted peacefully through the trees, as a sparrow’s melodious voice pierced the silence of the calm summer day. Nearby, a muddy path snaked through the grass and further on, a stream meandered through the hills on the other side of the forest. The calming sounds of the water reached the ears of every creature around it. Overhead, the bright sun burnt down on the forest creatures. This was a land nobody had been able to reach before. It was paradise.
Ewen, I think that your setting description is absolutely beautiful. Your vocabulary choices and sentence structure, together with the literacy devices you have used are so effective. With your permission, I would like to post your description on Owls’ blog to inspire my class. Please can you let me know. Thank you, and well done.
Sure!
Brilliant, thank you
Part two
As the blood thirsty creature felt our heroine’s presence, he found at last a descent snack. As the four-legged beast crept up behind our heroine he got ready to pounce. 1 2 3 he pounced ripping the air as he shot like a bullet and landed on top of are defenseless heroine. The dark deed was done. As our heroine lay dead and immobile, the beast started to head home. A trickle of blood ran from his mouth.
The swaying trees blocked all sunlight as a strange and mysterious girl walked past. This girl was no ordinary girl. She was a shape-shifter who turned into that horrible beast that killed our beloved heroine. She was a killer and she knew it…