Thanks you to Grace, Ewen and Noam for sending in your Harry Potter themed Newspaper Reports!
To read Grace’s Gargoyle Gazette click here.
To read Ewen’s Draco’s Drama click here.
To read Noam’s Hogwarts’ Times click here.
Please constructively criticise the work by awarding two stars and a wish. What features of Newspaper Reports can you spot in the above pieces?
Grace I’m pretty sure the Ministry made the trial.
Thanks for correcting me Max, I will correct that when I get home.
I really like Grace’s fronted adverbial ” As a consequence of his actions, “. I also like her vocabulary choices and the fact that she added in some extra stuff like a sports update.
Thank Phoebe.
Grace
Star: I loved that you added the advertisements and sports updates for extra detail.
Star: You used lots of great language and year 6 punctuation.
Wish: At the beginning of the article you say “A young third year boy-Draco Malfoy-has”
instead of- A young third year boy Draco-Malfoy. At least, that’s what I think you meant.
Thanks for the feed back Cathrine, That is what I meant to say and I will definitely correct that when I get back home.
I really liked your one Ewen I thought it was definitely High quality.
Can you be more specific in you feedback please, Grace? Thanks!
Thank you!
Nice
I really liked Noam’s report as it was very informative on what happened. Just wanted to say: Hagrid’s full name is Rubeus Hagrid… Not Rubies Hagrid!
sorry I will correct that
thay all are good but i like the harry potter more
I think all of them are really good but I like how Grace put advertisements at the side of it to make it look more real.